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Redundancies are created by unnecessarily expressing the same idea or using the same word or phrase repeatedly. While it is often a good idea to mention the topic of a paper or paragraph more than once, so as to remind the reader of the paper or paragraph’s focus, mentioning a topic too much can actually detract from the quality of your writing. Likewise, mentioning a noun (especially a proper noun) too often, without substituting, for example, “she”, “he”, “this”, or “these”, can seem overbearing and is typically considered poor form. Variation is one key to good writing. Consider this example:

• This paper will focus on the history of American literature. This paper will start by focusing on the history of American literature as it relates to the history of literature, in general. The history of literature is, generally, related to the history of humanity. The history of American literature is particularly concerned with the history of humanity because early American settlers and political leaders were highly influenced by the Age of Enlightenment, which was highly concerned with humanity.

This paragraph makes several mistakes. It uses some words far too often – and a few more than once in the same sentence. The word “history” appears seven times, while the word “literature” appears five times, and the word “humanity” and phrase “history of American literature” three times each. While there is sometimes a fine line between using a word or phrase too little, just enough, and too much, in general, it is best to not use the same word twice in the same sentence (when the word is distinctive, e.g. history, but not necessarily when the word is generic, e.g. it) and to vary your word choice in both sentences and paragraphs (just as you should vary sentence structure).

Consider the following examples of words that are too close together:

• This paper will focus on the history of American literature. This paper will start by focusing on the history of American literature as it relates to the history of literature, in general.
• This paper will start by focusing on the history of American literature as it relates to the history of literature, in general. The history of literature is, generally, related to the history of humanity.
• The history of American literature is particularly concerned with the history of humanity because early American settlers and political leaders were highly influenced by the Age of Enlightenment, which was highly concerned with humanity.
• The history of American literature is particularly concerned with the history of humanity because early American settlers and political leaders were highly influenced by the Age of Enlightenment, which was highly concerned with humanity.
• The history of American literature is particularly concerned with the history of humanity because early American settlers and political leaders were highly influenced by the Age of Enlightenment, which was highly concerned with humanity.

This paragraph could be rewritten to read:

• This paper will focus on the history of American literature. It will start by considering the history of literature, which is, generally, related to the history of humanity. American literature has tended to be concerned with the course of human development, in part because early American settlers and political leaders were highly influenced by the Age of Enlightenment, which focused largely on understanding humanity.

Also, remember that variety and focus are not mutually exclusive. When varying your choice of words and phrases, try to avoid expressing or referring to key ideas that have already been mentioned in new but unnecessarily complicated ways.